This is the script Jim wrote in 2007 for a special feature in the Harbinger hardback. An interesting insight into the background of the big bad of the VALIANT universe. -JayJay
COVER:
Scene: Heroic, glamour shot of HARADA—stark, bold, dramatic and heroic! He’s our star.
ALTERNATIVE: A “movie poster” shot with a dominant, noble, heroic image of Harada, perhaps holding or levitating a globe (♫ “he’s got the who-ole world in his hands…”♪), or standing beside a floor-stand globe; with subordinate images of NORIKO (Harada’s wife), Pete, Kris, the battle from issue #6 between the Eggbreakers and our protagonists in which Torque dies, and/or other prominent images from issues # 0-7. Please do not show Solar, since he’s irrelevant to the subject matter at hand.
Noriko is Japanese, born in Oakland, California like Harada. She’s several years older than Harada, very pretty, very Western, modern and worldly, but with a good bit of that traditional Japanese demureness, drilled into her as a young child.
(NOTE TO WALTER: Is the “cover” planned for a recto? If so, then I humbly suggest that you make page 1 a recto as well, and use the verso of the cover for an introduction by the editor or publisher. Just a thought. Always thinkin’….)
LOGO
HARBINGER
BLURB
The Untold Story of Toyo Harada
PAGE ONE:
Panel 1 (1/3 page-but bleed up, right and left):
Scene: HARADA flies/levitates toward his home in the Oakland area. Harada is foreground, full figure. Show the whole house, background. DO NOT CROP. Harada’s dressed as he was in Harbinger #7, perhaps with his tie loosened. He looks tired. His home is in the upscale Piedmont Pines section, but is unremarkable by local standards—worth only $1-2 million. There are lights on. NORIKO is waiting up for him.
Please bleed this panel, but DO NOT RUN THE ART BEHIND OTHER PANELS! NO OVERLAP! THIS IS NON-NEGOTIABLE!
(NOTE TO THE PENCILER: This is a full script, it’s your job to design to accommodate and PLACE THE COPY, that is, make balloon placement indications! I come from the Stan Lee school of thought regarding lettering and balloon placement:
- Lettering and balloons should be as unobtrusive as possible
- There should never be any question about which balloon comes next
- As much as possible, balloons should stay out of the way of the art:
- Anchor balloons to the panel borders when possible, unless that puts the balloon too far from the speaker or otherwise causes problems
- Try not to cover anything important or interesting—especially light sources, signs, figures, critical details and especially heads
- Characters shouldn’t be wearing balloons like hats or balancing them like trained seals—avoid “resting” the balloons on heads
- If a balloon MUST cover part of a head, try to keep the coverage small. If it’s going to cover a head down to the eyebrows, it’s time to adjust the art
- If you can overlap a head a smidge into the balloon to avoid covering the head or trained seal syndrome, please do
- Try to have short, straight pointers aimed at the speaker’s mouth
- Pointers should come from around the middle of the balloon. Avoid those cat’s claw pointers at the ends of balloons, especially long, narrow ones
- Avoid “snakey” pointers
- Consecutive balloons from the same speaker should abut, if possible, with a bridge connector between them
- If a longer bridge connector is required, make it as straight and direct as possible.)
This entire book is material from my era at VALIANT (with the partial exception of #0, which was adapted from a plot of mine, but completed after I left). Stan’s rules for lettering, above, were part of our “house style” at that time, and should be observed for this story as well, which is meant to be part of that body of work. In those ancient days, because I was forced to have many panels and pages drawn before I wrote all the copy, some of the balloons ended up having to poke out of panels and into the margins. I hated that then, hate it now, and would prefer that you did not invade the margins with the copy.
LOGO
HARBINGER
TITLE
Failsafe
CAPTION
The Piedmont Pines section of Oakland, California. March 7, 1992, 4:30 AM.
Panel 2 (2/9):
Scene: Inside the house, establish a living room off of the foyer. Noriko—I’m seeing her in a fuzzy bathrobe and expensive silk nightgown—looks surprised to see him. Maybe she was drinking tea, reading a book and is just getting up to greet him, here. Somewhere in the BG, show at least one SERVANT, Japanese, please—probably bowing to greet Harada. All full figures.
SERVANT
Mister Harada! Good evening, sir.
NORIKO
Toyo. I didn’t hear the car pull in.
HARADA
There was a back-up on 580. An accident. The driver is probably still stuck in that mess. I brought myself the rest of the way.
Panel 3 (1/9):
Scene: Angle on Noriko and Harada. He’s pulling off his tie, maybe slumping in a chair, maybe levitating tea for himself from the servant’s tray with an appropriate gesture, please. He looks a little disheveled and exhausted. Noriko looks saddened, deeply troubled by his news.
HARADA
It’s been…a long, long day, Noriko. One of the renegades was killed—not Peter Stanchek, unfortunately. Three of ours were injured…badly.
NORIKO
More death. So many dead since this started. So many hurt.
Panel 4 (1/9):
Scene: Two-shot to intro Noriko and Harada. He’s gingerly touching the back of his head where Thumper thumped him in issue #6. Noriko seems less sympathetic than one might expect.
NORIKO
Are you hurt?
HARADA
I was hit from behind by one of ours. She felt a misguided debt of honor to the renegades. I’ll be fine. But I’m very tired. To bed, love?
NORIKO
I’ll be along soon.
Panel 5 (2/9):
Scene: Establish the master bedroom. Harada is asleep. I figure him for a sleep-naked kind of guy, so no jammies, please. The door is open and Noriko stands in the doorway, dramatically framed and backlit. There’s something ominous about the way she’s looking at Harada. Full figures.
CAPTION
5:29 AM.
PAGE TWO:
Panel 1:
Scene: Angle to include Noriko and sleeping Harada. She’s in a chair, now, staring at him rather balefully, lost in dark contemplations. The door is closed, the lights are out, but the sun is up (sunrise: 6:31 AM), so some light is leaking through the blinds and/or curtains.
CAPTION
7:19 AM
Panel 2:
Scene: Another angle on Noriko and sleeping Harada. Noriko is carefully sliding open the drawer of the nightstand.
CAPTION
8:01 AM
Panel 3:
Scene: Close up to reveal what Noriko is fetching from the drawer—a knife. Not some awkward kitchen knife, but a serious, dagger-type-gonna-kill-somebody knife.
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Panel 4:
Scene: TRICK SHOT! Angle on Noriko to make it look like she’s merely holding the knife, calmly examining it. What she’s really doing here is calmly, coldly SLICING HER PALM, but the angle is such that we can’t tell. Angle this to include sleeping Harada, i.e., shoot past him, cropped, foreground, slight upshot.
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Panel 5:
Scene: Noriko stands over Harada, the knife held in a downward stabbing fashion in her un-sliced hand. Her sliced hand is clenched into a fist, as one would do instinctively. A VERY SUBTLE hint of blood from the slice may be (barely) visible. Be crafty! Not too obvious. The knife, of course, is bloody, but it’s too dark in here for that to be too apparent. I assume the nightstand would be beside the bed, and that Noriko would only have to turn or take a small step to be “addressing” Harada, i.e., standing in position to kill him.
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Panel 6:
Scene: Medium. Noriko stands over Harada, now holding the knife with both hands, raised high—poised to stab him. Again, maybe there’s a tiny trickle of blood down her left wrist, or just an inkling of blood near her left hand. SUBTLE!
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Panel 7:
Scene: Close up of Noriko, a face shot, though we should be able to tell her arms are still raised as if to stab. Tears are running down her cheeks—but she looks like she might do it—teeth clenched, intense, determined.
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Panel 8:
Scene: A sliver? Blank—all black, all white or all red. You pick.
PAGE THREE:
Panel 1:
Scene: Foreground, Noriko stands at her vanity. She’s turning on one of those small, illuminated vanity mirrors for a little light. On the vanity, besides what you might expect, is a Dayplanner, open to March 6 (though we may not be able to discern the date here). Noriko still holds the knife in her sliced hand, since she’s using the un-sliced one to turn on the mirror. The knife is good and bloody (especially since she’s holding it in her bleeding hand), and now we’ll be able to see the blood—dripping, even. Also, now the blood from her sliced hand is more evident in general—it’s gotten on her robe, on her nightgown, etc.—though it should not be clear where all the blood is coming from. In the background, hidden in the general darkness too well for us to see clearly, is Harada, in a distinctly different position than when we last saw him. There’s blood all over the covers—all from Noriko’s hand, but we hope the readers will think it’s Harada’s blood. He’s still asleep, but if readers think he’s dead, that’s okay by me. Make this a big enough shot and show enough (shadowy) environs to reset the room.
CAPTION
8:07 AM
Panel 2:
Scene: Close up of the Dayplanner and Noriko’s hand as Noriko starts to turn the page. There is blood on her hand and on the Dayplanner where she touches it. We can see some of the ENTRIES for March 6, in her nice, neat script.
ENTRIES
(some may not be seen, or only partially seen, but get the point across—this woman is the charity queen)
7:00 AM: 7-8:30 Serving breakfast at the shelter
8:00 AM: 8:30 – Home to change
9:00 AM: Call Ray at P.Pines Neighborhood Assn. re: Earth Day plans
10:00 AM: Kim’s – nails, hair, makeup 10:15 – call S. Hayes to discuss points to cover in keynote speech at IAVE World Volunteer Conference
11:00 AM: 11:15 – call J. Hyland at bank re: wiring donation to CARE acct. # 090-71 (rest of number obscured)
12 PM: 12-1:30 Lunch w Debbie and Jan – Grill Room, Sequoyah Country Club (CROSSED OUT, REPLACED WITH) 12:30-3:00 Int. Red Cross fundraiser luncheon – they’re giving me a Circle of Humanitarians award!
1:00 PM:
2:00 PM:
3:00 PM:
4:00 PM: Nature Conservancy board mtg – S.F. office
5:00 PM:
6:00 PM: 6:00-9:00 guest lecture at Cal Berkeley – School of Social Welfare/Haviland Hall – don’t forget to bring the slides!!
7:00 PM:
8:00 PM:
9:00 PM:
10:00 PM: Conference call w IAVE Global Volunteer Council Asia-Pacific Regional board
Panel 3:
Scene: Match the previous angle, but Noriko has turned the page to March 7. The date, March 7, is circled again and again (in blue pen—too much red blood around to use red…no?). There is only one ENTRY. A drop or two of blood lands on the page.
ENTRY
9:30 AM – Madame Rowena
Panel 4:
Scene: Foreground, in the bathroom, Noriko is half dressed—possibly she has on a skirt and a bra and is brushing her hair. The top she’ll put on may be in evidence somewhere. Her clothes are casual but expensive. Show evidence that she has cleaned herself up—i.e., wet towels and/or washcloths with blood stains on them, whatever. Noriko’s sliced hand is now bandaged—and so, please place in evidence somewhere a roll of gauze, some adhesive tape, Mercurochrome (or a reasonably modern antiseptic equivalent. Unguentine? Dunno. God, I’m so old….). Please give a hint of the bedroom through the open bathroom door to cement the idea that this is the bathroom off the master bedroom. If possible, BG, show Harada still in bed, still sprawled in the same position as we saw him last time.
Okay, that’s a toughie. What we want to establish here is that Noriko has cleaned up, patched up her hand, is getting dressed and that Harada still appears to be dead. I can see a possible shot in my befuddled head, awkwardly described above, but do it any way you see fit. We don’t really have to see Harada here.
Panel 5:
Scene: Noriko, fully dressed now, is removing something from a wall safe that was hidden behind a picture (a Renoir or somesuch) in the bedroom. The readers can’t tell what it is, but I’ll let you in on it—it’s that teddy bear Harada was carrying when he murdered his parents:
Panel 6:
Scene: Medium to establish the area outside the master bedroom. (BTW, a good source of floor plans is www.architecturaldesigns.com .) Noriko, carrying a small shopping bag (with the teddy bear inside), is closing the bedroom door behind her. SERVANT 1 and another servant (neither is the one we saw earlier) are doing servant stuff. They are bowing, or at least looking like they’re acknowledging what Noriko is saying.
CAPTION
9:13 AM
NORIKO
Mister Harada is not to be disturbed.
SERVANT 1
Good morning, Mrs. Harada. Hai. No disturb.
PAGE FOUR:
Panel 1:
Scene: Establishing shot—a small, (rather phallic) peninsula of land jutting into San Francisco Bay at the foot of Gilman Street in Berkeley, California. Here’s a Google Earth OH shot:

Noriko is parking her 1992 Lexus LS 400 in the adjacent parking lot. There is an 87-year-old Caucasian woman, MADAME ROWENA at the end of the peninsula. She’s in one of those motorized scooter/wheelchair/power chair things. Pix of such are available all over the web—there’s the Scooter, the Hoveround, Invacare and lots more.

CAPTION
Near the corner of Gilman and Buchanan in Berkeley, 9:37 AM
Panel 2:
Scene: Noriko approaches Madame Rowena, who’s sitting and looking out at the water. She’s dressed a little like a Gypsy fortuneteller, but don’t go overboard. Madame Rowena is blind, by the way—big, dark, blind-person shades, please. Prominently visible is her white, blind-person cane—a rigid one, since the collapsible ones are hard to recognize when they’re folded. She’s holding it, or it’s leaning against the handlebars.
MADAME ROWENA
(Not looking at Noriko, as if that would matter)
Noriko. You’re late.
NORIKO
Sorry, Madame Rowena.
Panel 3:
Scene: Two shot to establish Madame Rowena and re-establish Noriko. MR is still “looking” out toward San Francisco Bay. MR carps at Noriko. Noriko is mildly amused.
MADAME ROWENA
What do you mean I shouldn’t be coming down here by myself?
NORIKO
I didn’t say that…yet. But you are rather frail. And blind.
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
Screw frail. And I use other peoples’ eyes. I like the view.
Panel 4:
Scene: Madame Rowena zips away in her power chair, headed back toward Gilman Street. She has her cane in one hand, resting on her shoulder, the way a woodsman carries his axe. Noriko starts to follow, amused again at MR’s outrageousness and crankiness.
MADAME ROWENA
Let’s go back to my place. Leave the car. You need the exercise. You’re getting a little chubby.
Panel 5:
Scene: Exterior establishing shot of Madame Rowena’s home and place of business in an old, somewhat run-down residential neighborhood that begins ten or so blocks up Gilman. The street slopes upward slightly as you head east away from the Bay in this neighborhood, which is actually Westbrae. Madame Rowena’s modest, somewhat dilapidated house has no wheelchair access, so she parks her power chair by her doorstep. She’s entering, here, lugging her arthritic, old body along with difficulty, using her white cane as a walking cane. Noriko is well behind, out of breath, also struggling to complete this journey. There’s a small neon SIGN in one window. Make it groovy and tacky.
SIGN
MADAME ROWENA
Reader and Advisor
MADAME ROWENA
I get the feeling you’ve done something terrible.
NORIKO
Maybe…yes, I have. Maybe.
Panel 6:
Scene: Inside Madame Rowena’s “office,” a properly tacky fortuneteller’s den. MR is settling herself into her ornate chair. On the table in front of her is a crystal ball. Any other tacky fortuneteller paraphernalia you care to exhibit around the room is welcome. Noriko is entering, out of breath. There is, of course, a customer’s chair across from MR’s.
MADAME ROWENA
Tell me the whole story again…ut! Don’t you sass me. I’m eighty-one! I forget things. I can’t remember who I insulted an hour ago!
NORIKO
Why don’t you just read my mind? You’re doing pretty well so far.
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
I will…but if you’re talking about it, it helps me see what happened.
Panel 7:
Scene: Noriko is now seated. Madame Rowena is doing that hokey, Gypsy fortuneteller concentrating thing. Noriko begins the tale of Harada.
NORIKO
My husband was born in 1951 in Oakland, son of Japanese immigrants….
MADAME ROWENA
I’m getting nothing.
PAGE FIVE:
Panel 1:
Scene: Noriko pulls the teddy bear out of the shopping bag. Madame Rowena lights up.
NORIKO
Maybe this will help?
MADAME ROWENA
Aha! That’s the ticket!
Panel 2:
Scene: Close up of Madame Rowena, snuggling the teddy bear, melodramatically remembering.
MADAME ROWENA
Right away there were occasional flashes of strangeness – – things floating in the air above his crib, silent screaming inside his parents’ minds when he wanted something….
Panel 3:
Scene: Another angle to include (and feature!) the crystal ball, which now shows the scene described in the dialogue! Madame Rowena is smiling, remembering.
NORIKO
They took him to lots of doctors who just thought they were crazy. So, eventually, they brought him to you.
MADAME ROWENA
Yes! Ah, I was so young and pretty! Look at me!
(NOTE: “…young and pretty.” Madame Rowena is 43 in the CB! Harada is three.)
Panel 4:
Scene: Focus on the crystal ball—show enough of the CB to make it clear that’s what it is. What we see in the CB is toddler Harada, in his toddler PJ’s, clutching the teddy bear, lying on young, pretty Madame Rowena’s table (the same one) with young pretty MR touching his forehead, doing that concentrating thing. Remember, this takes place in the early fifties, long before those baby-buckets, or Pampers or anything modern was invented. Toddler Harada is weirdly calm—and has the beatific look of a toddler Harbinger having a revelation/being popped.
MADAME ROWENA
I read the kid’s mind…
Panel 5:
Scene: In the crystal ball—up-shot, close up of young, pretty Madame Rowena’s face with toddler Harada’s little hands reaching up toward it. If we happen to be able to see old, real-life MR’s face here, BG, it’s mimicking young MR’s expression.
MADAME ROWENA
I don’t know how, but my messing around in his mind opened up his power!
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
I realized he was like me, but…far greater! It scared me.
Panel 6:
Scene: Pull back, reset the room, Noriko and Madame Rowena. The teddy bear is lying on the table next to the crystal ball. MR is sincerely engaging Noriko, here.
MADAME ROWENA
We’re different. A new kind of people.
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
I think I was the first of us. You know, like that “Lucy” Doctor Leakey discovered, who was the “Eve” for all you regular people…?
Panel 7:
Scene: Angle on Madame Rowena, contemplating the teddy bear, musing.
MADAME ROWENA
I didn’t realize I was special till I was twenty-some. Till then, I was mostly just faking it, like mama – – except, like your husband, I had those occasional flashes till I opened up.
PAGE SIX:
Panel 1:
Scene: Focus on Noriko. Shoot past the crystal ball in which we see Harada murdering his parents—a different shot than seen on the Harbinger coupons, please.
NORIKO
Yes. Well, Toyo’s parents feared him more and more…and he feared them. They wished he’d never been born…even thought about killing him. He knew, of course.
MADAME ROWENA
He struck first. Too bad for them.
Panel 2:
Scene: Close up of Noriko.
NORIKO
He came to me. We were neighbors. He was six, I was eleven. He asked me to go away with him. Be his wife. Take care of him. He needed someone.
NORIKO
I don’t think he forced me….
Panel 3:
Scene: Another angle on Noriko, remembering. In the foreground, in the crystal ball, please show young Harada walking on the boardroom table—different angle than on the coupon, please.
NORIKO
I took care of him as best I could. He used what he could do to make us rich. He built a business empire, despite his youth.
NORIKO (2nd)
But the older he got, the more he learned about the world, the more unhappy he was.
Panel 4:
Scene: Similar to previous. In the crystal ball show the classic image from the Tiananmen Square riots.
NORIKO
He began to intervene. He was instrumental in solving the Cuban missile crisis…Apartheid…Tiananmen Square…the fall of the Berlin Wall…so many more.
MADAME ROWENA
Hmf! Who appointed him God?
Panel 5:
Scene: Focus on Madame Rowena.
MADAME ROWENA
There are downsides of trying to manage the world.
NORIKO
(Possibly off-panel)
Yes. There have been failures. The Bay of Pigs, though he was still very young, then. Viet Nam. The Mideast mess. Manipulations gone wrong. Many have died. Now, this thing with the renegades….
Panel 6:
Scene: Two-shot, but feature Madame Rowena.
MADAME ROWENA
Our kind should lay low, let the old kind run their course. Interfering is stupid. Dangerous.
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
All right, now I remember all that crap. Anything new?
NORIKO
A young man was killed last night by his “Eggbreakers”…you know – – if you want to make an omelet…?
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
Yes, yes, very clever.
Panel 7:
Scene: Noriko pulls the bloody knife from her purse. Madame Rowena reacts with shock.
NORIKO
This morning, I thought to kill him. I took this knife….
MADAME ROWENA
You didn’t…!
PAGE SEVEN:
Panel 1:
Scene: Pull back to reset the room. Harada is entering, hale and hearty, if still tired.
HARADA
No. She didn’t.
MADAME ROWENA
(Disappointed)
Fiddlesticks.
Panel 2:
Scene: Madame Rowena scolds Noriko as she leaves with Harada. Harada has the teddy bear, holding it in a dignified, manly sort of way.
MADAME ROWENA
You should have done it!
MADAME ROWENA (2nd)
Get out of here, Toyo, you sick freak! And take your chattel with you!
Panel 3:
Scene: Noriko looks back at Madame Rowena.
NORIKO
Next year?
MADAME ROWENA
If I’m still compos mentis.
NORIKO (2nd)
“Still?”
Panel 4:
Scene: Harada flies himself and Noriko away (to her car, if you must know). They talk. Harada gingerly holds Noriko’s bandaged hand.
HARADA
I forgot what day it was till I saw your Dayplanner.
HARADA (2nd)
You cut yourself again. I wish you wouldn’t do that. Blood everywhere…
NORIKO
I need to feel the pain and see the blood. It makes what I am contemplating real to me.
Panel 5:
Scene: Closer on Harada and Noriko.
NORIKO
I…still believe in you. But you know I can’t stand the deaths…the suffering.
NORIKO (2nd)
You could just wipe away my doubts. And Rowena’s knowledge of them….
HARADA
No. There must be a control. When you stop believing in me…end it.
HARADA (2nd)
As for the old woman – – who would listen to a fortuneteller?
Panel 6:
Scene: In the bedroom. Noriko sleeps. Harada sits in a chair, watching her sleep, lost in his dark contemplations—and clutching his teddy bear.
CAPTION
March 8, 2:34 AM.
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